First, I couldn't help but notice that your avatar is rather.. feminine.. for someone with the name Kevin. You can set an avatar of your own under Manage -> Character. (:
Second, Keir is the one who handles descriptions, and he has stated that he typically does not respond to descriptions which he rejects due to the large volume of mail which would require a response, and due to his own lack of time when people ask him "Why did you not accept this/How can I fix this?" (His answer to those questions is typically along the lines of, "If I knew that, I would have written it myself." In other words, there aren't usually specific factors he looks for - he just approves descriptions which are suitable.)
As such, just keep in mind that descriptions should not include ship stats, or any substantial amount of canon information which might not be relevant here. You can look at approved descriptions (already on the rules pages) for some ideas.